Thursday, December 3, 2009

My first shot at 55 fiction

Posted by Pratiba Bhat at Thursday, December 03, 2009








He was made by heavens for her.

Secretly he fell for her.

She lived in agony waiting for her love to find her. 

Never knew he was already sent to earth.

He reaches to her under the moon lit night. Asks, "Will you be mine?"

She hugs him tightly. Replies, "Yes I will. I'm yours"




10 comments:

shridhar said...

Excellent effort and nice words ..
Keep up the spirit ..

Its great that u take time out of your classes/project work in final year.

world health said...

nice blog.. lady..!!

wanna to exchange link ....?

aninosaintlife said...

needs a little editing. missing articles. other wise no prob :) good one.

Pratiba Bhat said...

@shridhar Thanks a lot for the wishes dear... :D :D
@world health Thank u so much... Yes why not..:D I'll be more than glad :D :D :D
@aninosaintlife Thank you for the genuine feedback... Yes I noticed that about the articles :D :D :P Will try my best in the next one... :D Thanks for noticing it :D

narendra said...

i beg to differ..i still feeel people tend to get poetic with 55f!! i mean where are those characters?what happens to them?what is the climaxx?what is the story line..well nonetheless this is a good attempt..and this is just my two cents on it...all the best..

Raghu said...

Nice imagination! I loved it...
Nimmava,
Raaghu.

ದಿಲೀಪ್ ಹೆಗಡೆ said...

Nice effort... All the best.. :)

Ayaan Arora said...

Heya Pratiba.... fairy tale huh... ;-) its splendid for a 1st try.. Good attempt.. extremely romantic story ;-) keep it up.. good luck ;-)

ಜಲನಯನ said...

Pratibha, my comments
Story in Abstract fiftyfive -simply super

Mahesh Kalaal said...

Hi...
I jus bloghopped here...
Pleasant and crisp story
Good 55ier but i think the shock and suspense are missing which are essence of a 55 fiction.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/55_Fiction
Keep writing :)

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